Hey guys,
Looks like I'm the caboose this week! Sorry so late! Here's a sentence I found in the Honolulu Advertiser regarding yesterday's scrimmage after the boys had their "mock draft." I think maybe the author could have been more clear about his point. At any rate, here's the sentence:
"The deal was finalized a minute before the game's start, further evidence that practice isn't always essential."
I would probably break it up into two sentences and say:
"The deal was finalized a minute before the game's start. This quick decision making was further evidence that practice isn't always essential."
However, I'm still not sure what the author was trying to say?
1 comment:
Nice job of editing, Chantel.
I'm also unsure of what the author was trying to say. Maybe one of the sports fans in the class can tell us…
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